From the notes of Tuesday West

[Karina]

I put this on my "To Do List" and promptly lost the list, but hey, I remembered now!

I enjoyed the story, and would really like to see what happens next. As Virmir said, there were a few typos, but other than that it was pretty well done. It does have a video game intro feel to it, or maybe a similar movie scene, but that's not a bad thing in the slightest. As I said, I would love to see the story continued, I think you have something interesting here.

[Shadow99611]

Yeesss, auto correct is my sworn enemy... Combine that with the fact that i need to proofread more, and you get what comes next.

As for the game/movie-like intro? I play looottttsss of FPS games, and that may have had a slight influence.

I'll get writing more when I have the time, relying on the rules for all of reality I've stated before..