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on: September 30, 2010, 01:01:02 AM

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Reply #1 on: September 30, 2010, 08:39:03 PM
I would consider re-wording the first balloon, "Inspiration, like a real ferret, is lured...", to keep it all singular so it flows better.

Loving this comic so far. [:)

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Reply #2 on: October 01, 2010, 02:47:25 AM
Agreed, Vimir.



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Reply #3 on: October 01, 2010, 12:28:43 PM
I like the upside-down "Shiny!" dialogue

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Reply #4 on: October 01, 2010, 01:31:16 PM
Revised and fixed. Need to fix the spelling of a pass strip eventually too. >.>

And thank ye. ^^ Now its moving to the Beyond. *colors and scans frantically*

Shiny shall appear at random like this...as you would guess. ;3