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Niro

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on: March 15, 2010, 10:54:58 PM
This is the Prologue of Tales of a Fox.
The first is in Word 2007, the second is in RTF.
Feel free to voice any criticisms whether they be with the content or grammatical. I hope to have chapter one completely finished and proofed by this coming Saturday or Sunday, no promises though.
Enjoy.
« Last Edit: March 15, 2010, 11:00:44 PM by Niro »

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Reply #1 on: March 18, 2010, 09:16:28 PM
Looks like a solid start, Niro.  Looking forward to reading more. [:)

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Reply #2 on: March 21, 2010, 08:13:15 AM
I love the setting you've chosen. The idea of a girl trying to escape from an enemy that you specifically do not over-describe is a bit gut-wrenching. Very effective. ]:)

Then again, what is it with writers on this forum and apocalyptic worlds??? ANYWAYS...

It's hard to tell how the story will go from here, but presuming that the story DOESN'T just end here, the wraith will perform some kind of possession of her? Or...something?

Nice job on the terrifying story. ];) I hope to read the next chapter soon.

...but that's just my opinion, so don't let it bother you too much!


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Reply #3 on: March 21, 2010, 04:40:21 PM
I think this is just the prologue to Niros Epic novel, which he says hes been sitting on for ages! (and heas just been editing, i think)

Ack.. Poor Girl though X( thinking she had just made it... but running into a greater evil...

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Reply #4 on: March 23, 2010, 08:16:29 AM
I'm rewriting certain parts of it Kai. I have a lot of the end story finished, I just have a problem on how to introduce characters properly.

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