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on: May 26, 2014, 02:36:40 AM
Lost in other dimensions Pt 1(using CF chat)

 CZM_adif using flashlight.
(13:53:34) CZM_adif: emmhhh.... hello... somebody here?
(13:54:54) * CZM_adif walking
(13:56:40) * CZM_adif searching....
(13:59:00) * CZM_adif found a letter
(14:03:40) CZM_adif: what's is it?
(14:03:51) * CZM_adif open the Letter
(14:04:02) * CZM_adif Read
(14:08:44) * CZM_adif Letter says" you must find a clue in here before you time is end. a deep from abyss"
(14:09:07) * CZM_adif pick up a White Rose
(14:10:05) CZM_adif: mhhh.. a rose.....?
(14:10:14) * CZM_adif Read again
(14:10:53) * CZM_adif Letter Says "Rose is your Life now"
(14:11:27) CZM_adif: huahhhh... a rose!!!!
(14:12:06) CZM_adif: i must find Clue in here now....]:O
(14:12:42) * CZM_adif walking in the grand hall
(14:13:31) CZM_adif: huffhh... i must find a clue...
(14:14:31) * CZM_adif see a pages in Grand hall
(14:15:03) * CZM_adif Pick up pages
(14:15:08) * CZM_adif read
(14:16:51) * CZM_adif pages" you will be in warning"
(14:17:22) CZM_adif: hahh...me... why me?
(14:18:13) * CZM_adif walking in grand hall again
(14:19:43) * CZM_adif felt that follows him
(14:20:03) CZM_adif: who's there !
(14:20:34) * CZM_adif shining a flashlight into the back
(14:21:08) * CZM_adif nothing
(14:22:20) * CZM_adif bloody mannequin doll blink follow CZM_adif
(14:22:39) CZM_adif: arrgghh... get out of me!!!!
(14:22:50) * CZM_adif running
(14:24:23) * CZM_adif kick bloody mannequin dool
(14:24:52) * CZM_adif Cracked*
(14:25:08) CZM_adif: huffhhh...i'm safe
(14:26:06) * CZM_adif keep walking
(14:26:53) * CZM_adif see bloody portrait
(14:27:05) CZM_adif: what is this?
(14:28:25) * CZM_adif see a number on Bloody portrait
(14:28:58) * CZM_adif Number is "6551"
(14:29:44) * CZM_adif write the number in the Note
(14:30:26) CZM_adif: i think it's useful]:)
(14:31:11) * CZM_adif white rose petals plucked from the stalk
(14:32:01) CZM_adif: awhhh... petals now is 4 more
(14:32:39) * CZM_adif keep running
(14:33:39) CZM_adif: i must faster!!!
(14:34:34) * CZM_adif walk to the labyrinth
(14:35:05) CZM_adif: arrgh...labyrinth
(14:35:19) * CZM_adif keep running
(14:36:07) * CZM_adif 10 mannequin Doll follow CZM_adif
(14:36:35) * CZM_adif keep running
(14:37:00) * CZM_adif 2 ghost follow CZM_adif
(14:37:12) * CZM_adif Keep running!!!!!!!
(14:37:54) * CZM_adif see a way out
(14:38:17) * CZM_adif door locked
(14:39:33) * CZM_adif see attached door lock number
(14:40:14) * CZM_adif Enter a key number "6551"
(14:40:55) CZM_adif: arrghhh....faster..they follow me to kill me!!!!!
(14:41:07) * CZM_adif Door now open
(14:41:45) * CZM_adif enter the room and close the door
(14:42:03) CZM_adif: huufhhh... im safe]:
(14:42:53) * CZM_adif white rose petals plucked from the stalk
(14:43:11) CZM_adif: arrghhh... petals now is 3 more
(14:43:55) * CZM_adif walking because low stamina
(14:44:15) * CZM_adif see a mannequin head
(14:45:01) * CZM_adif searching the mannequin head
(14:45:29) * CZM_adif get a Blue key
(14:46:36) CZM_adif: i think it's can be useful
(14:47:45) * CZM_adif keep running in the 2 different dimensions
(14:48:54) * CZM_adif see pages in the stairs
(14:49:13) * CZM_adif pick up pages
(14:49:24) * CZM_adif read
(14:51:04) * CZM_adif Pages" come here CZM_adif "
(14:51:49) CZM_adif: I had to go into the blue door...
(14:52:10) * CZM_adif see pages again
(14:52:19) * CZM_adif pick up pages
(14:52:26) * CZM_adif read
(14:52:50) * CZM_adif pages" blue door is your destiny"
(14:53:12) CZM_adif: fiuuhh.. a good pages
(14:53:21) * CZM_adif keep walking
(14:55:23) * CZM_adif walk to the large room
(14:56:17) * CZM_adif keep walking
(14:56:47) * CZM_adif found a Red rose
(14:57:26) CZM_adif: i think it's not my Rose....
(14:57:53) CZM_adif: but i must pick it for save...
(14:58:03) * CZM_adif keep walking
(14:59:05) * CZM_adif locked door had been broken
(14:59:26) * CZM_adif heard the sound of broken doors
(14:59:55) CZM_adif: ahhhrrrrgghh...dammit!!!!
(15:00:04) * CZM_adif run faster
(15:01:22) * CZM_adif trapped by barbed trap
(15:01:47) * CZM_adif illness
(15:02:02) CZM_adif: arrgghhh.... im bleeding
(15:02:34) * CZM_adif keep walking
(15:03:33) * CZM_adif see a blue doors
(15:04:21) * CZM_adif 2 white rose petals plucked from the stalk
(15:04:29) CZM_adif: arrghhh....
(15:04:38) * CZM_adif keep walking
(15:05:22) * CZM_adif open the Blue doors with Blue key
(15:05:39) * CZM_adif closed the blue doors
(15:06:24) CZM_adif: huaafffhh....
(15:06:41) * CZM_adif see a pages
(15:07:46) * CZM_adif pick up pages
(15:07:54) * CZM_adif read
(15:12:02) * CZM_adif pages"You have to choose which one you want roses live if you sacrificed or Red that should you sacrifice"
(15:12:32) * CZM_adif Shocked
(15:14:10) CZM_adif: what... i must to do!!!
(15:14:33) CZM_adif: ......
(15:16:19) * CZM_adif red says "I sacrifice to not continue to suffer in your body"
(15:17:24) CZM_adif: no...red!!!
(15:17:31) CZM_adif: I had to sacrifice myself
(15:17:53) CZM_adif: I have to accept it
(15:19:00) * CZM_adif put a red rose uncontrollably
(15:19:15) CZM_adif: red.......
(15:19:51) * CZM_adif Red says" i will to be your friend forever {:)"
(15:19:58) CZM_adif: ]:(
(15:21:03) * CZM_adif doors dimensions coming
(15:21:24) * CZM_adif doors says"sacrifice is complete you should get out of here"
(15:21:59) * CZM_adif see wilted red rose
(15:22:17) * CZM_adif crying
(15:22:41) * CZM_adif walk to dimensions doors
(15:24:05) * CZM_adif back to the other dimensions grand hall
(15:24:37) * CZM_adif get out from dimensions doors
(15:25:16) * CZM_adif gloomy
(15:25:57) CZM_adif: red...gone............
(15:26:22) CZM_adif: huffhh....i lie with myself
(15:27:25) CZM_adif: he always with me in chat
(and now CZM is not in cursed with Red again)
« Last Edit: May 26, 2014, 05:49:15 AM by CZM adif »

"i was being ignored by everyone and alone again... it's hurt..., but... clemaxgra was pets my head from behind for cheer me...." (CZM) :)


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Reply #1 on: May 26, 2014, 06:41:41 AM
lost in the other dimensions final

and when CZM left Red. CZM back to rescue Red with using Handgun and flashlight

(18:40:25) * CZM_adif coming
(18:41:00) CZM_adif: hah... a museum of galery?
(18:41:11) * CZM_adif searching
(18:41:44) * CZM_adif see a pages on portraits
(18:42:00) * CZM_adif pick up pages
(18:42:06) * CZM_adif read
(18:44:04) * CZM_adif pages says "do you want your friends is back huh! he now is my friends . stupid Fennec fox, by mary"
(18:44:15) CZM_adif: arrrghhh....
(18:45:29) CZM_adif: i must comeback the Red now. but i must find the Red's "rose" now.... white roses wilt before.
(18:45:59) * CZM_adif running
(18:46:45) * CZM_adif see a pages
(18:46:59) * CZM_adif read the pages
(18:47:38) * CZM_adif pages said" want a red rose huh"
(18:48:00) CZM_adif: i think Red rose now in here...
(18:48:09) * CZM_adif searching
(18:49:38) * CZM_adif see a wilted red rose
(18:49:55) CZM_adif: aha!!!.... i got it
(18:50:21) * CZM_adif pick up wilted red rose
(18:51:36) * CZM_adif 1 portraits crawl and attack CZM
(18:51:49) CZM_adif: get out of me!!!
(18:52:09) * CZM_adif shoot Portraits with handgun
(18:53:07) * CZM_adif portrait be destroyed
(18:53:45) CZM_adif: i must give a water for the Red rose.
(18:54:15) * CZM_adif give water to Red rose
(18:54:31) * CZM_adif red rose now have 7 petals
(18:54:46) CZM_adif: huafhh....
(18:55:17) CZM_adif: now.... i must find "Red" now
(18:56:06) * CZM_adif walking in the museum
(18:56:23) * CZM_adif see a pages again
(18:56:29) * CZM_adif read
(18:56:52) * CZM_adif pages said"wanna play with me?"
(18:57:57) * CZM_adif door closed by itself
(18:58:11) CZM_adif: hah !!!
(18:59:05) * CZM_adif all mannequin doll walking to kill CZM
(18:59:54) * CZM_adif run and shoot mannequin with handgun
(19:00:42) CZM_adif: come on ... where the way out in here ..
(19:00:50) * CZM_adif keep running
(19:01:23) * CZM_adif falling into the abyss
(19:01:42) CZM_adif: arrgh.....
(19:02:29) * CZM_adif landed
(19:03:38) * CZM_adif see a room full of blood with mary sit on the sofa.
(19:03:43) * CZM_adif see red caged
(19:06:58) CZM_adif: release Reds now mary!!!
(19:07:43) * CZM_adif pointing a hand gun to Mary
(19:08:27) (Mary): good.... you will save your friends now.
(19:09:38) (Mary): let see the end red fox
(19:10:01) * (Mary) took a carving knife
(19:10:17) (Mary): i kill you!!!!
(19:11:18) * CZM_adif shoot the mary's foot with handgun
(19:11:42) * CZM_adif run and open the Red's cage
(19:12:07) CZM_adif: are you okay red?
(19:12:24) * CZM_adif Red's nods
(19:12:47) CZM_adif: okay let's get out in the here now!
(19:14:24) * CZM_adif running while holding Red's hands
(19:14:45) * CZM_adif run faster with Red's
(19:17:03) * CZM_adif see a dimensions portal
(19:18:29) * CZM_adif mary attack CZM with carving knife(white rose petals plucked 3)
(19:18:53) * CZM_adif get illness in the hand
(19:19:56) (Red): i will kill you mary if you make a trouble with my friends!!!!
(19:20:01) * (Red) angry
(19:21:15) * (Red) burn yellow Rose with lighter
(19:21:40) (Mary): no!!!!!!!!!
(19:22:10) * (Mary) gets a shoot from CZM with handgun
(19:22:59) CZM_adif: i kill you first before you kill me..
(19:23:17) * CZM_adif Mary's dead
(19:24:10) * CZM_adif see dimensions portal will be vanish
(19:24:31) CZM_adif: hurry Red's!!!!!!!
(19:26:01) (Red): if I'm allowed to live in your body forever?
(19:26:48) CZM_adif: for friends forever  ];)
(19:27:23) (Red):  {:)
(19:28:38) * (CZM_Red) entered into the same portal together
(19:30:31) * (CZM_Red) out from other dimension in a fused condition
(19:31:05) (CZM_Red): CZM: we turn into normal?
(19:31:31) (CZM_Red): Red: yeah...  {:)
(19:32:14) (CZM_Red): CZM: hurrayyyy.....  ]:)
(and all days turn back to normally after all CZM and Red put white and red roses in a vase )
« Last Edit: July 17, 2014, 01:40:28 PM by CZM adif »

"i was being ignored by everyone and alone again... it's hurt..., but... clemaxgra was pets my head from behind for cheer me...." (CZM) :)


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Reply #2 on: May 26, 2014, 09:13:14 PM
Hmmm... would suggest sticking to writing stories in story format, CZM! Reading a chat log is a little too rough, I think. [;)

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Reply #3 on: May 27, 2014, 04:00:00 AM
Agreed, it would help to have a clearer separation of prose vs. dialog anyway

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