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Crimson Flag Comic / Crimson Flag Avatars!
« on: April 04, 2009, 12:48:04 PM »
If anyone would like an avatar of a character from a comic panel with the speech bubbles removed, let me know!  Just post your request here or bug me in the chat. [;)  Also let me know if you have size preferences.

Avatars posted here are for free use throughout the web.  (Link-backs are most appreciated. [:)) If you want to use them for this forum, you can link to the image directly.  Otherwise, please save the image locally.

For Pontos:


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Writer's Guild / Re: The Four Heroes
« on: April 02, 2009, 08:12:28 PM »
By the GODS... that is the most horrible avatar I've seen in my entire life...

Oh, right, story... continue on. [;)

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Website and Technical Discussion / Re: Welcome!
« on: March 24, 2009, 07:58:22 PM »
Welcome Ty!  Thanks for stopping by. [:)

Hmmm... this thread here already looks intro-ish. [;)


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Crimson Flag Comic / Re: Recent Comics (>=31)
« on: March 23, 2009, 10:49:16 AM »
They're happy because they're vacationing in a warm climate. [;)

On a side note, how is Emiline related to Lucian? Little sis, Cousin, daughter of a family friend??

She's his half-sister.

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Crimson Flag Comic / Re: Recent Comics (>=31)
« on: March 21, 2009, 11:01:40 PM »
Ha ha... hey, I left all the other stuff for you to mill over. [;)

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Crimson Flag Comic / Re: Recent Comics (>=31)
« on: March 21, 2009, 10:37:25 PM »
I'll comment on the markings, to save people from speculating on a dead end. [;)

Yes, gray foxes naturally have red markings.  Originally I intended to color them all gray, but this was only because during early design phases I tried coloring a few of my own drawings with red highlights and was less than pleased with the results.  Lucian was the first character designed, so his style went this way.

This bothered me though, so after a few more attempts I managed to get them to look okay with red markings.  So basically when it comes down to it, Grays' natural markings vary from no red at all, to a moderate amount like Edmund has.  Actually if Lucian ever gets his shirt ripped off in battle or something, I will probably give him a bit of red on his chest or sides to avoid confusion. [;)

(DISCLAIMER: Virmir reserves the right to totally revoke all this if something contradictory comes up in the comic X years from now. [;) )

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Art Gallery / Re: Artic Landscape
« on: March 16, 2009, 04:23:11 PM »
Not bad! 

Nice foreboding dark clouds to signify the evil that is cold. [;)

I like the detail in the wave too. [:)

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Writer's Guild / Re: The Four Heroes
« on: March 16, 2009, 11:19:55 AM »
Yay!  You're posting it!!

I already gave you tons of comments so I'll wait until we get to the new stuff. [;)

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Writer's Guild / Re: "Reyan Saga" (unfinished)
« on: March 11, 2009, 10:18:45 PM »
"Packs" are a very non-fox thing.  Remember that foxes are loners, apart from finding a mate.  We will definitely see more than one reyan and explore their interactions with each other before the story ends, though. [:)

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Writer's Guild / Re: "Reyan Saga" (unfinished)
« on: March 11, 2009, 06:17:26 PM »
Gavin doesn't seem as human anymore. Which is good or bad, depending on how you depict it. he's growing out of his human ideas fast, which seems natural for the flow of the story. You could have developed on this topic more if you wanted too, but pushing the story forwards more is probably your main objective right now. Who knows? Maybe at a crucial moment his human instincts will kick back in again...

The human vs. reyan way of thinking was more of a side effect than an objective, but I'm very glad you noticed it.

One thing I hate in transformation fiction is when people get zapped into animals, they sense the animal mind as a second presence in the back of their mind or something.  That's just so silly... I much prefer the human thinking like an animal without realizing it, or retaining their human mind and slowly learning to think like the animal. 

But, more importantly, why is Mara afraid of Gavin?

Also, don't forget that the turgan, by Gavin's estimate, are only about eight inches tall.  And Gavin has very sharp teeth. [;)

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What's the correct pronounciation of Turgan and Lelran?

Ter-gan (ter like turn, gan like ran)

Lel-ran (lel like fell)

Thanks for the feedback!  Should be some answers to some of your other questions in upcoming chapters. [:)

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Writer's Guild / Re: "Reyan Saga" (unfinished)
« on: March 08, 2009, 12:40:04 AM »
Thanks!  Fixed it. [:)

In case anyone is wondering, I'm not capitalizing reyan, turgan, etc. because they are species names, much like human or fox aren't capitalized.

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Writer's Guild / Re: "Reyan Saga" (unfinished)
« on: March 07, 2009, 06:22:59 PM »
Short one, but here's part 3 at last.  Need to keep this thing moving. [:)

Part 3

Water awaited him when he woke up.  He expected it to be foul and stale, but it actually tasted cool and refreshing as he lapped it like a dog.  The bowl seemed hand- (or paw-) made out of clay.  While it was probably huge for his captors, unfortunately for Gavin it offered little more than a sip.

The bindings around his legs were gone, and the one around his neck looser as well.  He could actually move to the other side of the cavern to relieve himself.  It felt good to stretch his legs after being tied to the ground, even if he had to do so on all fours due to the low ceiling.  He hoped they would untie him altogether.  It wasn't like he could go anywhere without his lifestone...

Held hostage inside a cave, he could do little more to pass the time than run his claws through his tail and listen to the faint chittering voices that occasionally echoed down the tunnels.  He inspected the rope around his neck.  It seemed to be made of tough reeds wound together and looped like a chain.  He almost felt as if he could break it-- or at least chew through it.  But alas, there was no point while they held his lifestone.  He held a paw over his heart and shuddered, remembering how much it hurt when the elder ferret-thing squeezed it.

The second time he awoke the bowl was full again. This gave him an idea.  He went through his stretching routine, drank his water, and sat and contemplated just as he did before.  But before drowsiness took him, this time he shut his eyes and pretended to sleep, ears perked attentively as he curled into a ball and hid his nose in his tail.

It took a while, but eventually he heard the rasping clicks of tiny claws on stone, and half-cracked one eyelid to get a glimpse of the creature refilling his water.  It peeked from the tunnel mouth tentatively, and the smell he began to associate with the creatures filled his nostrils.  Carrying a sloshing clay container, it tip-toed to the bowl which lay only a foot from his nose.

He waited until it finished pouring the water before he opened his eyes completely, and he saw that it was they yellow-green female that had called the crotchety elder with the twig-cane "father".  "Hello,"  he said, softly as he could manage.

Her long tail stood on end, every stand of fur on her body bristling as she dropped the container, some leftover water splattering upon the floor.  They locked eyes for a long, awkward moment, before finally she managed a meek "hel-hello," of her own.

Gavin folded his ears and tried to look as least intimidating as possible.  After all, this one wasn't one of the ferret-things that mocked him as far as he remembered.  "Thank you," he managed in a carefully measured tone.  She nodded in response.  But when he moved forward to take a sip, she scurried off in a hurry.  He sighed and drank his water alone.

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Gavin measured time by refills of his bowl, and it didn't take long for him to realize he wasn't getting fed.

It surprised him that his hunger stayed at bay for so long.  Could the berries really have sustained him that long?  Maybe it hadn't really been two or three days... Maybe he had only been captive for a few hours.  No, that couldn't have been right.  At the very least two days had passed.  He would have to ask Mara the next time she came.  Either way, he was getting hungry now...

He'd been able to pry bits of information from her each time.  The second time it was her name.  The third time he learned his captors were called turgan.  Odd-colored little tunnel creatures they were, guided by an elder.  Gavin sighed.  All he was able to do was sit around and think.

He heard the familiar click of her claws against stone and watched her enter the little tunnel room, painted by the orange torchlight.  At least he didn't have to pretend to sleep anymore, though she was still much more comfortable with him lying on the floor.  "Hello, Mara."

"Hello, Gavin," she said as she strained herself with the water jug.  There was always a tiredness in her voice.

"Mara, how long have I been here?"

"'Tis your fourth night, I'm afraid.  The first day ye were asleep."

Gavin folded his ears.  Blast, he was right... "I thank you for the water, but may I please have something to eat?"

She looked up from her task and regarded him with a hint of fear, as if she expected him to gobble her up at that moment. 

He turned his head to the floor.  At that moment his stomach chose to rumble.

"Nay, I'm afraid..."  She sighed.  "Father says not to feed ye.  Ye wouldn't be getting water either if I didn't anger him.  'Tis my punishment..."  She looked up to his eyes and smiled, running her clawtips along the edge of the water jug. "'Tis not a horrible one, though."

Gavin returned the grin, though he did his best to keep his teeth hidden.  He knew how much they scared her.  "Thank you again... I'm glad for the water.  But how am I to grant your father's wish if I'm hungry?"

Her eyes fell to the stony floor and she ran her toeclaws along the dirt.  "I shouldn't be telling ye this... but he wants ye hungry when ye attack the lelran."

Hungry?  What does that have to do with...  "What... is a lelran?"

Mara seemed taken aghast.  "Ye don't know what a lelran is?"  She ran her nails through the fur just behind her ear.  "Then again, ye didn't know what a turgen was either..."  She stared him in the eye. "The lelran are evil, Gavin.  They took... so much from us.  I know father is harsh to ye, but really, by killing the lelran, ye will be doing us a great service."

"Killing?  That's his wish?  He wants me to kill--"

"Mara!  Don't talk to the reyan!  Get back when ye are done!"  The elder's screeching voice echoed into the cavern room.

Mara's tail frazzled and she let out an animalistic chirp.  "Eee!  Coming, Father!"  She fell to all fours and scampered to the tunnel mouth before pausing .  "I'm sorry..." she whispered, then ran down the corridor.

Gavin sighed and rested his muzzle on his paws.  He didn't feel much like drinking water.

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Random Topics / Re: A Book You Should(?) Read.
« on: March 03, 2009, 09:10:26 PM »
You have a typo in your links.  Those two again are here and here.

I like the sound of both of those.  Though the first one is $150 on amazon.com?!  The second is $6... will more likely start with that one. [;)

Honestly I'm not much of a paper book reader, as I do all my reading on my PDA.  Although it is nice to look at a non-glowing screen every once in a while, so I've been meaning to try picking up a book sometime. [;)

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Writer's Guild / Re: Swarmy
« on: March 03, 2009, 08:39:42 PM »
Ha ha!  Loved this. [:)

I will agree with Lopez in that I'm not sure I really get the ending.  I don't think you want to trample them both though, as that would destroy the connection the raccoon sees with the human and the swarmy.  (Loved that part!)  I will admit I was expecting the raccoon to die and the swarmy to live by the end though. [;)

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I seem to have a hard time understanding the ending a bit. Especially the last word. I don't really think the word "squeed," Def from Urban Dictionary.com:"When you laugh and pee comes out " is what you're going for. It makes it sound like Dirt just thinks the humans are utterly rediculous. There's another word you're looking for.

Hmmm... was unfamiliar with that definition.  I assumed it was the verb for yelling "squee!!" in past tense. [;)

This tale was short, quirky, and fun.  Really nice work!

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Random Topics / Re: TopWebcomics Ranking
« on: March 01, 2009, 10:30:57 AM »
Ha ha, blast, missed the momentous occasion.  [;)

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