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Title: Meep! Meep!
Post by: William Swiftfoot on December 06, 2010, 06:00:48 PM

Here's the second of the three trades I owe. Akusai of FA gave me free reign and after a description of activities, I came up with the energy drinks(originally it was going to be a cardinal, but I decided this would be cooler)

Title: Re: Meep! Meep!
Post by: Virmir on December 08, 2010, 08:06:21 PM

*grins* Looking at the title, I'll admit to wondering "what the heck is this one going to be?" until I got a few lines in. [;)

Couple of typos though!  You use "fir" in place of fur at one point, and I think you miss a word or two on a few sentences.