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Other Realms => Writer's Guild => Topic started by: Jonas on August 15, 2010, 01:40:51 PM
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I'm going through a werewolf phase, have a weakness for the Big Bad Wolf, and have been reading Agatha Christie. This is the result.
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Hah! Nice take on the classic. Not what I expected, but a rather refreshing change.
The first PoV switch threw me off for a bit. You might find some way to make the transition smoother. It works the way it is, but it was pretty confusing.
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Interesting, and quite the unexpected ending. I liked it. {;)
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Gave me a good laugh. And I honestly did not expect the wolf to work with the guy, even despite what you said in the chat and the tone of first part. I expected something more in lines of the girl getting suspicious about the wolf, and hiring or otherwise convincing the man to assist her. {;)
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Great story! Loved the ending. [:)
The only problem with this is that you use first person for two different characters. This is a big no-no because it's confusing as heck. I had to go back and re-read a few paragraphs when this happened, and in all honestly, I thought you were hinting to hint at some body snatcher or shape-shifting theme. [;) I would seriously consider re-writing one of those characters in the third person.
But all-in-all, was a fun story once you get past that. Always looking forward to reading what you put out. [:)