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Shifting Sands

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on: September 12, 2010, 11:04:09 PM
Okay... after being DEMANDED multiple times... here is a story I made when I was even younger... That being said, I know that it could be much better, and that so, so, so very much is not possible, even by fantasy standards... And I also know that half of it is me just putting in "A" instead of "B" in Virmir's stories. >.>

Anyway! Have fun with reading it... I didn't want to fix any mildly annoying errors before I posted it, so you already know what I think!  |:P



Corpses were scattered about the cave, some fresh kills, while others had been there long enough for them to decay and rot away. All of them were placed in such a grueling pose, it was a wonder anyone would approach this cave, let alone bounty hunters like ourselves.

“You don’t think the bodies are a good enough sign to flee?” I asked them.

“I don’t appreciate having to fight an immortal mage anymore than you, but we need gold if we want to survive,” Evine responded.

“Get a grip, Drezin. Whoever’s beyond here, they can’t be any more dangerous than any other bounty we’ve tracked down before. Remember the naga?” Cyrus questioned.

That wasn’t something that we wanted to remember, but we constantly had to refer back. A small group of naga had been attacking Cyrus’ home village, and he demanded we go there immediately and save the villagers. Cyrus was a friend, and Evine and I followed him to the village to find all the villagers dead, and the naga still raiding their houses. Those mutants prided themselves on witchcraft, and changed half of Cyrus’ hand into one of their own scaly monstrosities. Of course, it only made Cyrus more angry and headstrong, so we dominated the naga but didn’t save anyone, nor receive a bounty.

“Yes, but this is an immortal mage! They live forever until someone finally kills them, and this one seems to enjoy the competition!” I yelled.

“We’ll take precautions,” comforted Evine, “and if bad comes to worse, I have a teleport ready.”

Mages varied everywhere you went. There was the occasional arcanist like Evine, helping some royal family exterminate whatever they wanted. There was the Shadow Mage, spending all their days in a rundown village or murky cave, killing anyone that trespassed and using their blood to incant their spells. Then there was the immortal mage, our bounty, who had figured out how to use the most dangerous of spells and extend their lifetime, devoting every second of every day to studying more spells. I seriously doubted that our precautions could dampen the blow of this mage.
“Let’s just keep moving and get this over with,” I muttered.

The three of us trudged on in silence together through the cave, past more skeletons and corpses. Evine was practicing his barrier of magic the whole way, but whether it would help or not would be discovered eventually. The only thing I could do to calm down was flip my dagger in the air, catching it straight on the hilt, or when I was feeling more confident, going for the tip of the cold steel.

   Bodies were becoming more and more clustered together, indicating that we were approaching whoever this bounty was. The passage became narrower, pushing us into a line formation instead of the more efficient wave we once had.

    “Wait!” yelled Evine. He threw a lightning bolt through the air, triggering several trap runes as it moved through the corridor. Cyrus gave a surprised clap, and Evine just kept moving. All serious business with him.

   The passage expanded again, revealing a gigantic room littered with bodies. Stalactites hung from the ceiling, none reaching even a quarter down to the floor. There was a bookcase filled with spell books, Evine himself gaping at the number of them. In the center sat a young girl at a wooden desk, not looking more than seven years old.

   “THIS is what you were worried about Drezin?! HA!” laughed Cyrus. He moved closer and closer to the girl, making me more and more worried.

   “Cyrus, get back!” yelled Evine. He pulled up his magic barrier around himself and I, Cyrus too far out of reach.

   “You really should listen to your friend,” said the little girl. She moved the chair back without any part of her body, then floated up about nine feet into the air, just tall enough for Cyrus’ sword to be out of reach. She used another spell and took his sword straight out of his scaly fingers, sticking it into the ceiling right above her. We all stared up at in awe.

   “When we kill this girl, Evine, I’ll get you that spell,” joked Cyrus.

   “I could teach him myself, thank you,” said the girl. “And my name is Eleanor!”

   I pulled out my bow, reached down into my sling of arrows, and shot it straight at the rock around the sword. The rock crumbled and the sword was falling to the ground, but Eleanor suspended it with a spell in the air, spun it around, and then brought it straight to herself. She took the sword and threw it into Cyrus’ armor, breaking right through it and stabbing through his chest.

   “CYRUS!” I yelled. He wouldn’t move, just lying there on the cold rock with a fountain of red spewing from his stomach. Eleanor retrieved the sword in his chest, more blood leaving the wound. “Where’s that teleport, Evine?!”

   “It’ll take time!” He started shooting fireballs straight at the girl, but none of them even touched her. “What are you waiting for? Shoot her!”

   I joined in with Evine, a volley of arrows with spells, none of them touching Eleanor. She began floating back down to the ground again, still being pelted with weapons. She slowly walked over to us, her barrier still holding up. We still fired, even when she was straight in front of us, but nothing would pierce through her defenses.

   I reached down into my sling, but nothing was there any longer. Evine was also looking exhausted, one last spark before he stopped.

   “I like you,” Eleanor said simply, pointing at me. “I think I have something for you.”

   She used yet another of her spells, breaking through our simplistic barrier, picking me straight up off the ground. She looked up at me, spinning me around in the air, making me sick. Then she threw me into the wall of the cave, shattering my right arm and leg.

   “Drezin!” yelled Evine, beginning to run over to me.

   “I think I like you too,” Eleanor said, repeating the process with Evine, throwing him into the opposite wall.

   Eleanor simply giggled, and I blacked out.

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   I woke groggily to find myself in a rusted iron cage, still in the same cave. The pain in my arm and leg was nonexistent now. I looked around and saw Cyrus’ corpse on the ground, his two-hand by his side. Evine was on the other side of the room in a cage the same as mine, glancing at me.

   “Drezin!” he yelled. “I still have my teleport, but I can only get one of us out of here!”

   “Go!” I responded. “You need to go tell the Council we have a problem!”

   “I can’t leave you here, though!” he argued.

   “We don’t have time for this!” I finished.

   “The sleepyheads are awake?” asked a high voice. Eleanor entered the room, staring at both of us. “Good, I was getting bored of waiting. Immortality can be so dull, which is why I’ve kept you. Which one of you is first for my show?”

   Evine began to incant his spell.

   “Ah, you want to go first!” giggled Eleanor. She walked over to him, looking him over as he was casting. She brought out several other iron cages filled with animals: horses, foxes, birds, wolves, the entire sort.

   “Which do you like the best?” asked Eleanor politely.

   Evine didn’t interrupt his casting for a second.

   “Fine then, I’ll choose for you.” She picked up the cages like feathers, and when there was an animal she didn’t want, she threw cage against the wall, shattering the sturdy iron and animal alike.

   “Ah, here’s one!” she yelled. Eleanor had selected a red fox, his tail ending in a white tip, ears pointed, and eyes darting around. “Now hold still,” she instructed Evine and the fox.

   Eleanor began to incant a spell of her own. She was almost singing the words, bringing the whole cave to a silence as it listened to her. Evine screamed out in pain, interrupting his own spell, and the fox was barking, yipping as Eleanor continued. I reached around in my pockets for my dagger, maybe to break up the spell, maybe to kill her, but it wasn’t anywhere I could see. I could hear bones snapping, I could see Evine’s muscles contorting, but there was still nothing I could do about it! Where was the dagger? Where was the dagger?!

   Then, all at once, it stopped. Eleanor was silent. The fox was non-existent, and Evine was lying against the cold bars of the cage, not moving.

   “Yay!” Eleanor blurted out. “Your turn!” she yelled as she pointed at me.

   If what had just happened to Evine was going to happen to me, I didn’t want it. I started looking for somewhere I could escape the cage, but my fist wouldn’t do anything against iron.

   “Do you want to choose, or should I choose for you?” Eleanor asked.

   There had to be some way out! Nothing can be foolproof!

   “I think you two would look better as a pair,” she said, and had a gray fox picked out, looking just as terrorized as the last one. It looked a bit bigger than the last one, white fur underneath his eyes and around his muzzle, his tail ending just like the red fox.

   This couldn’t happen. I didn’t want to die! I needed money to live, killing evil to earn it, and now I’m going to die from it?! And I’m going to take an animal with me? What was Eleanor doing?

   Eleanor began casting the spell in the same singsong voice, the process repeating. The gray fox was barking, growling in desperation, and I tried to find a way out of the cage again. Maybe I had found the way out, but then my body started twisting, breaking, tearing itself apart. The fox had disappeared, leaving me alone to face the pain. I screamed out once, clawing at the air to get me out of this excruciating pain, but there was no hope then. Eleanor had stopped casting. It all went dark again.

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   I woke up.

   But I’m not supposed to wake up! I’m dead!

   But I’m awake.

   I saw what happened! This isn’t what life is!

But I’m awake.

No, I’m not! There’s nothing to feel!

But I feel awake.

How is this here? I died! There was nothing else to it!

I’m thinking.

No! Dead people don’t think!

Aren’t I?

Am I really doomed to this? Arguing with myself?

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What was that smell? My eyes wouldn’t open, but my nose could smell something… musky. I could hear birds. I could feel wind hitting my eardrums. But my body wasn’t so sensitive before. Was this death? Or was I still alive?

I forced my eyes open and saw a canopy of trees and leaves, the blue sky behind it, with no clouds in the sky. I pushed myself onto my feet, taking a look around. It was the area right outside of Eleanor’s cave! I wasn’t dead, but why was I so sensitive? I placed my hands in front of my face, just to see that they weren’t the same hands I remembered.

They were paws!  Paws covered in gray fur, like the foxes’ in the cave! I could look down and just barely see a muzzle sticking out of my face, a few whiskers popping out! A tail was swaying back and forth behind me, tipped with a bit of white, just like the fox!

My leather armor slipped right off. My bow was too large for me. Everything wasn’t the correct size all of a sudden.

But I was still standing on two legs… And I could think like this. Was this Eleanor’s spell? And where was Evine? Ugggh… I was lost in a new body, and nobody was going to accept an anthro-fox anywhere I went.  I might as well go find somewhere for shelter, get some food and some water.

Smells were overwhelming. The birds flying overhead, the pollen picked up on the wind. I could hear rushing of water, and tried to follow it, but I was disoriented, looking around, my… tail getting caught in my footwork.

I smelled meat somewhere; must’ve been rabbit. I tried yet again to get something to fill my stomach, but I was just too big or too small to get anywhere without a problem. The rabbit had already heard me from several feet away, and escaped.

Just where could I go from here? Evine, the only mage I knew, was nowhere to be found so I was stuck like this for a while. Lyniel Hold despised magic, so if I could manage to get over there they might as well execute me. A village could trap me and tear me up, the biggest fox they ever saw, roasting on a pot before them. I’m never going to be able to kill an animal on my own, but at least I could follow the sound of water.

I found the creek’s clearing in a few minutes and looked down into the water. There was the new me, white fur underneath my eyes and around my muzzle. The eyes were strange; black everywhere except the iris, which was a dark hazel like my eyes used to be. Then there was my new height, not nearly as tall as I used to be. But I still wasn’t small enough to pass off as a fox! How was this working? How was I half-human and half-fox? I needed to find someone who could help!

I went back out into the forest, looking around for anybody to help. I would have even taken my chances with Eleanor, but I had lost my sense of direction again. What was I supposed to do? I might as well try to find a fresh kill and push the other animals out of the way.

Right when I was about to get this hunting thing right, a trap swallowed me up.

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 “It could be dangerous, though! How do we know that the humans are in control of the bodies, not the foxes? They could escape into the streets, stealing from stalls and swiftly vanishing!

“Do you really think that these three would be hard to find? Take a good look. They have tails two feet long, for God’s sake! Their faces stick out, and they have claws! Those ears would perk up the moment they heard something interesting! Would it be that difficult to find them?!”

 “That’s just it, though! Claws! On a mixture of a paw and hand! With tails, tripping anybody who follows them! And they would hear anybody getting anywhere close to them!”

“They’re chained up! They won’t escape! Let’s at least see what they really are.”

Were voices always so loud? Of course not. But there was no escaping that right now, my ears would pick up voices farther than fifty feet away.

I had to force my eyes open again, taking a look around where I was. Murky smell… again. Cobblestones with mold… Chained, hanging off the ground on a wall. For the third time, I was in Lyniel Castle’s dungeons. But now, I wasn’t human. Still, the chains fit, and there wasn’t any escaping these dungeons, I had already found.

I looked to my sides, and saw not one, but two other people staring at me, chained up just like me. Not only that, but they both were anthro-foxes. Both were naked, just like me, but one was female, the one to my right. We all stared at each other, wondering how it was we had other people like us. The female had a strange coloring, red, gray and black in patterns on her body. The eyes were strange, blue in the iris, the rest of the eye black. Her tail ended in a white tip, just like mine. The male, on the other hand, had his whole body enveloped in red fur, but his tail still ended in that white tip. The eyes were much same, just green in the iris.

“H-hello?” stammered the female. Her voice was higher pitched than most normal people, but then again, we were definitely not normal people.

“Hi,” I blurted out. I hadn’t used this new voice before, and it had certainly heightened in pitch.

“Do you know why we’re here?” she asked, desperate for an answer.

“No, sorry. What about you?” I directed at the other male.

He shook his head.

“What are your names?” I asked. “We might as well get to know each other if we’re the only half-human, half-fox people.”

“Brooke,” she answered.

“Evine,” the other said.

Wait, Evine? This happened to him, too? Did he not know how to get himself out of this? Were we all stuck as anthro-foxes?

“D-drezin,” I stuttered. Evine thought it over and realized what had happened.

“What’s wrong?” asked Brooke.

“We happen to know each other,” explained Evine. “Right before we became like this, that is.”

I could see how he matched up with the fox Eleanor picked, and he seemed to do the same with me. But why our tips ended in a white tip was still a mystery. Did it even matter?

“How?” Brooke asked.

“We were bounty hunters, killing people with money on their heads. Then we came across a particularly dangerous mage, and here we are now,” I told her.

“How’d you get to be like this?” Evine asked of her.

“Magic, just like you two,” Brooke said. “I was moving through the forest, and a cave caught my attention. There were a few trees around the entrance, almost guarding it. I took one step into the cave, my last footstep, and then I blacked out. I wound up right in front of the castle, and the guards threw me in the dungeon.”

“Trap rune, maybe?” Evine wondered. “Probably Eleanor’s cave.”

“So you don’t know how to change back, Evine?” I asked him.

“There is no way,” he said simply. “I already thought out everything that could possibly remove the reynards, or vixen for Brooke, and there is simply nothing to do.”

Nothing? Nothing. I might as well be stuck arguing with myself for the rest of eternity. Maybe there is something I can do to at least get used to this.

Brooke was absolutely terrified. I could hear her sharp breathing and could smell her sweat, being stuck like this until she died.

“On the semi-bright side,” Evine explained, “we’re now immortal…”

Well, now until she was killed by impossible magic. Brooke might as well have had a heart attack, killing her then and there, but no such luck.

“Why haven’t you gotten out of here yet, Evine?” I asked him.

He pointed down at the shackles restraining us, glowing a faint purple. “Magic shackles, too,” Evine said.

Voices crept down into our cell, a pair, perking our ears up.

“You’re going to talk to them?!” one was yelling.

“You’d rather we kill them?” the other replied.

“Yes! They could have a disease! They could spread this half-human, half-animal disease all over the castle! I think I would rather kill them!”

“They’re chained up, like I’ve already said! If you’re really afraid, cover your mouth and nose with a cloth or something; I’m going to talk to them.”

The two barged through the door, walking straight to our cell and entering it, shutting the door behind them. The shorter of the two was pudgy, not much taller than my new self, wearing some linen shirt and holding it over his face. The taller wore some leather, just like what I had used to wear. He was maybe a foot, foot and a half taller than me.

The taller one was glancing over us, following the ears, down through the fur to our paws, down to the tail, and then down to our feet. The shorter stood there in disgust, still keeping his face covered.

“Can you understand me?” the taller asked.

“Yes,” the three of us said in unison.

“Do you have a name, and if so, what is it?” he asked of us.

We all stated our names one at a time, their left to right.

“No last or middle names?” asked the shorter one.

“I… forgot…” I told him. The others had as well.

“See? Wolves in lambs clothing!” yelled the shorter.

“Just! Hold! On! You don’t use magic; would you like to explain what happened to them and why they can only remember a part of their name?” asked the taller.

The pudgy one sighed.

“Good. Now, do any of you have any family?”

I knew myself and Evine had none, killed by the outbreak of flu years ago. But Brooke wasn’t the same.

“A sister,” she said.

“Where is she?” he asked.

“On the Council,” Brooke said. “King’s advisor.”

I would have slapped myself if I hadn’t been shackled. First, Evine and I had tried to pull off shady deals for people. Then there was the fact that the Council banned magic in the hold. Only the arcanists’ library didn’t have anti-magic runes in place.

“Really? What’s her name?” asked the shorter again.

“Leena,” Brooke said.

The pudgy one stood there, frozen for a few seconds while he covered his mouth.

“Yes, that’s her name,” he said after he gathered himself.

“None of you were born like this?” asked the taller.

We all shook our heads.

“Magic, then. Alright. Guards, get these three some bread and water!” the taller yelled out of the cell.

“You can’t be serious! These three are hardly worth keeping in a cell, let alone giving them food and water!” yelled the short one.

“Unlock all the shackles; except for the right ankle,” the taller instructed. “Hurry up!”

The shorter stared at us in disgust as he unlocked our shackles, cursing and muttering under his breath. He still had the cloth around his face when he finished, and left with the taller. Guards entered with bread and water, just like my previous times here, exited and locked the doors behind them.

Funny, I heard no other inmates anywhere. We must have been “special cases”.

Three small bowls of water, and three sticks of bread. I hadn’t realized how hungry I was until the food was there. We were definitely special cases to deserve anything bigger than crumbs.

The three of us stepped over to the food, myself stumbling on my tail yet again. I was going to pick up the bowl and bring it to my lips, but before I had even touched it, I knew it was going to slip and deprive me of the only food for a while. So instead, I bent over and lapped it up, already feeling more comfortable than before. The water was cool and refreshing after being shackled. Brooke seemed to think that I had the right idea, and mimicked what I had done. Evine, on the other hand…

“What are you two doing?!” he yelled. We both looked up at him.

“Drinking,” I replied.

“Like dogs!” he added. His higher voice made his serious tone even funnier than before.

“Well, we kind of are, now,” Brooke said. I had already continued to lap up the water.

Evine was still staring at me. I looked up and told him, “You said it yourself: we’re stuck like this. We might as well get used to it!”

He was hesitant, but once he had started, he took a lot of the water in.

The bread was a bit easier. The pads on my paws were there, but miniature, and when I held the bread in both of them, it was stable. My teeth chewed differently, being half and half of human and fox, but it was natural, just different.

We had finished in a few minutes, and I started trying to walk around and not trip on my tail for a few steps. It obviously didn’t work; I simply couldn’t hold it up. Every time I fell over, Brooke would laugh at me (or something similar for anthro-foxes).

“You try it!” I told her.

She managed to walk for a whole minute without tripping, and didn’t trip when she finished, either. This tail was going to be a hassle, especially being immortal… Maybe I could find some sort of clothes to hold it up? If any fit me, that is.

I looked down at my feet and saw no pads on the bottom, but they were smaller and had claws on the ends of the toes. No shoes would allow those unless adjusted.

I felt around the top of my head and found triangular ears. They bugged me, perking up at the sound of anything different than silence, but they wouldn’t trip me like a tail.

My muzzle was annoying, changing my view like it did, but it still wasn’t a tail.

Then more voices crept down into our cell.

“This one inmate better be important,” a female complained.

“You’ll see just how important it is when we get there,” responded the taller of the two men from our last conversation.

Brooke’s ears perked up. “Leena!” she told us.

The two came to our cell and opened it. Leena recoiled in horror, screaming as well. She was a good foot and a half taller than me, just like the taller of the two previous men.

“What are these things?” she yelled. “They’re naked, magic monsters!”

“That,” said the man, pointing at Brooke, “is your sister!”

Leena was shocked at how he had told her how to view us. “That is not my sister! She was staying over by Spear Lake! She sent me a letter yesterday!”

“And you doubt that she could be here? Ask her yourself and see.”

“And why should I?!”

“Leena, it is me,” Brooke said.

“They speak?! And they impersonate my family?! Why aren’t they dead yet?!” Leena was screaming.

“Why don’t you believe me?” Brooke muttered.

“If you’re truly my sister, you would have to know something only we know!”

Brooke concentrated on something, standing around and swaying her tail. Then she stopped and spoke.

“You’re only King’s Advisor because our mom and dad were on the council. Our family solved what the king hated most: economic problems. You don’t even like your duty! You offered it to me!” Brooke finished.

Leena stood there, frozen just like the pudgy man from before. Then she ran into the cell and hugged Brooke, like a mother and a child embracing.

“Brooke… I’m so sorry…” Leena apologized through sobs. “Thank you, Richard.”

The taller man, Richard, nodded and handed Leena the key to our cell. Then he left the same way he had entered.

The two sisters finished and separated by a couple of feet.

“How, Brooke? Do you need an arcanist’s help?” offered Leena. “Do you need any clothes?”

 “If you could find any that fit, it would be nice. But he;” Brooke pointed at Evine; “said we’re stuck like this.”

“What?!” Leena cried out. “How would he know?”

“He’s an arcanist, and his name is Evine,” Brooke explained.

“I’m so sorry…” Leena said.

“We all got stuck like this from magic outside the castle. We think it originated from one person, but we’re not sure.”

“Where? I can go send a squad of guards immediately to remove the source!”

“I wouldn’t recommend that,” said Evine. “Do we really need any more of us?”

“But do we want her to hit the hold with a spell like this?” I asked. “I think you could send a squad to eliminate her, but you would need lots and lots of mages.”

Evine considered what I had said. “I agree with you now, Drezin, but let’s hold off until we really know that the arcanists are unbeatable,” said Evine.

Leena nodded. “I’ll get clothes for all of you. You two don’t seem like you should be locked up.”

She obviously hadn’t met us.

“If I could,” Leena whispered, “I’d let you out, but the most I can do is get you clothes.” She hugged Brooke again and left, locking the door behind her.

I lay down on the stone, my fur finally keeping me warm. The tail curved around to my head, creating a pillow.

“Already done for today, Drezin?” asked Brooke.

“Well, I woke up and found out I’m some freak human-fox mix. Then, I get questioned about something I hardly even remember now. I get fed. I get told that I’m a thing undeserving a cell in a dungeon. And then the very same person calling me a thing promises to get clothing for me, shrunken and using a tail for a pillow. I would have called it a day at the very first event.”

“Fine,” said Brooke.

It’s not too hard to fall asleep in a dungeon, especially when your own body can make a sort of bed. Maybe this could be worse. It could be better, but then again, Evine and I are the ones who decided to be bounty hunters.

-----

“Is he always like this?” Brooke asked me.

“He’s the only fourteen year old bounty hunter I know,” I told her.

“I can still hear you two!” Drezin yelled.

“Yes, he’s always like that.”

I should be used to this by now. I’m an arcanist! I practice magic for a living, but being the one affected by a spell was different. And a permanent one at that! But maybe this could help my spells, being half magic the whole time. I’d have to check once I could cast again.

I tried to sit down so I could concentrate, but that blasted tail kept getting in the way. No matter where it moved, it was somehow in the way. I might be stuck with this body, but maybe I could change that tail around.

Once I had found out how to sit down without crushing the tail, I sat there and thought. Eleanor was immortal at a young age; probably had mage parents. She had a collection of spells. Most seemed to be telekinesis, but there was that one melding-bodies spell, and her barrier stopped arrows and spells alike. There had to be some way to kill her, surprise her. Whatever way that we could go about it, there didn’t seem to be a way of accomplishing that. If there was a way to destroy that barrier, stop her from using it again, she could go down easy, maybe even contain her in a barrier of our own, retrieve her spells. No, too dangerous. But we could still remove her.

“Okay, Evine?” asked Brooke. I must’ve looked strange, thinking while a mixed species.

“Yes, just thinking. Drezin has the right idea; I think we should sleep.”

Drezin’s ears perked up, still strange to me. “Now you think I have the good idea…” he muttered. Of course, muttering didn’t have quite the same effect now.

“Do you really think we’re stuck like this?” asked Brooke as I moved back and leaned against the wall.

“I don’t think so. I know so. But we can try to make this normal. That’s the most we can do.”

It must have been getting dark, as the shift of guards was changing. Dungeons weren’t my favorite place to be, especially when I was there pulling Drezin out. For a fourteen year old, he had been bugging the castle’s guards all the time. He was a bit of a born thief, and he was probably only going to be quicker with these changes.

“You’re sure you’re okay?” Brooke asked again. Blasted muzzle!

“Yes.”

“Maybe I could get Leena to appeal to the council to do something about us being in the dungeons, maybe even letting us out on the streets again.”

“With what I’ve gathered from meeting her, I’d say she’s already done that.”

“Would you two be quiet?!” Drezin yelled.

Brooke took her tail and waved it straight over Drezin’s muzzle, making him sit up for once.

“What?!” he yelled again.

“Nothing,” Brooke said, smiling.

He crawled back up on the stone floor, using his tail again as a pillow. If I could just find some way my tail could be useful, this new form might not be so bad. But for now, nothing.

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Reply #1 on: September 12, 2010, 11:05:56 PM
“Richard, you’re taking this madness further! You insist on keeping those things in the dungeon, feeding them, and you even brought the King’s Advisor down to see them! You even let one of them practice spells in the library! But now you want to see another fight?”

“We have guards, don’t we? Maybe all three of them together could get through a guard, maybe two, but we have more than two guards. Are you not interested at all to find out how they got this way and what they can do?”

“Do you want to find out how cannonballs feel when they strike you in the face?”

“You didn’t have to tag along, Simone. You also don’t have to complain about every single decision I make!”

Great, these two again. They walked straight over to our cell again, opening the door and shutting it behind them.

I didn’t want to open my eyes to them; I could hear them perfectly well from the stairs, and I could smell the pudgy one, Simone. He had meat on his breath; whiskey, too. Richard didn’t have a particular scent, but I could still smell him.

Simone stepped forward and jabbed me with his finger. I opened one of my eyes to acknowledge him.

“I know what you’re here for, I could hear you out on the staircase,” I told him.

“Staircase?” he asked.

“I’ve been here before.”

“So, are you interested or not?” Richard asked. I turned my eye to him, and I saw him holding a steel sword and mail armor.

“I’ll play your games, but those aren’t going to fit, I can already tell you.” I got up and looked around the cell. I was still shackled, but the other two shackles were lying on the stones, empty. A pile of clothes sat in the corner where Brooke had been.

“Where are Brooke and Evine?” I questioned.

“Brooke is down at the Arcanists’ Library, our mages looking for some way that they could prevent this from happening again. Evine is down there as well, already testing how his spells work. Get those clothes on, and we’ll bring you down to the guards’ armory.”

I moved to the corner of the cell and sorted through the clothes. There was a black cloak, cut just so that it didn’t make me trip, and it reached around my body. Good, I didn’t need anything else trying to trip me. There was a pair of sandals or something, but I didn’t bother putting them on. They would only make tripping on my tail more painful. I slipped on the cloth pants, and thankfully Leena had noticed our humongous tails, and had a hole cut in the back. That blasted thing barely fit through the clothes, but it still did. There was a cloth shirt in the pile too, but now I had fur, and there just didn’t seem like there was a point to it.

“Let’s go,” I told the two. Simone walked over and unshackled me. I followed them out of the cell, and two guards equipped with spears followed us up the dungeon’s spiraling staircase. It led out and onto the foyer, no one in sight. That was okay, though. It’s not like I wanted anyone to see me. The five of us exited the castle through the front doors, sunlight piercing my eyes. Had it truly been that long since I saw the sun? No matter.

   Smells flooded my nostrils. It was overwhelming; some were vomit-inducing, others making my mouth water. Hundreds of peoples’ scents were also apparent, not helping my nose calm down. I could hear the footsteps of all of the hundreds of people, and the bargaining at the merchant stalls. While I could still see and observe everything about Lyniel Hold again, my new senses were much more overwhelming.

   I was so distracted that when we were stepping down the castle’s steps, I tripped on my tail… again. The guards had their spears directed at me in an instant, looking for me to escape or something. I slowly rose off the ground with my hands in the air, the guards still towering over me. While I can deal with fur, heightened senses and claws, being shorter than everyone except for the kids running around in the hold really sucked.

   We walked on in silence again towards the armory. Only a few people were between there and the castle, but all of them stared at me. I’m sure this wouldn’t have looked much better if I were about to be executed.

   The Guard’s armory was a boring place. The only people walking to and from it were guards, of course, and none of them ever want to deal with someone like me asking questions. That would be one of the reasons I was in the dungeons.

   The stone building had dummies outside, but there were five or so guards around the door, more than the usual patrol. More than that, they were using the dummies, and they were cut down to my height.

   “Ha! Look at the puny thing spin!” one would yell.

   “Go for the legs!” another yells.

   Most of the guards were laughing all while cutting the dummies up.

   “A-am I that big of a threat?” I asked Richard.

   “That’s what we’re letting them think. Either you win and almost kill one of the guards, maybe kill one, or you fail horribly and we throw your disembodied limbs back into the dungeon. Your choice is going to influence that, so you shouldn’t worry.”

   Richard and Simone both walked into the armory, probably trying to find something that would fit me. My escort moved over with the other guards tearing the dummies up, laughing along with them. I would bet that Evine and Brooke were having a better time than me, the midget fourteen-year-old animal-human.

   Richard stepped out of the armory alone, carrying only a long dagger. At least, it looked long from my new body’s eyes. The dagger was much the same as my old one, with a steel blade and a decorated hilt. To hold it, I had to dig my claws into my skin. It didn’t hurt too much, and I had a weapon I was familiar with, so all was good for now. Richard gave a whistle and all the guards turned around. He even caught some of the other folk moving around the guard’s armory. He noticed, and changed his voice accordingly.

   “People of Lyniel Hold! Today is a pit-fight for the ages!”

Pit-fight? What?!

“Here are seven guards, all of them in their sixth year of service!” More people gathered around us. “See their spears, their short swords? Their silver armor? They have accepted to fight this magically-changed, fourteen-year-old human!” Richard proclaimed. Even more people gathered around, forming a circle around the people at the armory. Some laughed, pointing at me. Others cheered on the guards they knew. I was obviously the under-dog here, but whether I was going to make a comeback was in the air. “This is his fight for freedom,” Richard told them, pointing at me. “If he wins, he can do as he pleases. If he loses, he is slaughtered right here!

“To make this fair,” Richard explained, “we are pitting him against one guard at a time. Will it be the guards who win this fight? Or will it be this creature?”

 I have a name…

 Fifty or so people (and counting) were gathered around us, none cheering for me. I didn’t expect to beat the first one, and if I did, there were six others!

   “I’ve got them expecting you to lose! Show them you won’t!” Richard whispered.

Pep-talk wasn’t going to help a fourteen-year-old anthro-fox fight seven guards!

Without warning, Richard pushed me towards the seven men, all looking down at me.

   “BEGIN!” he yelled.

   One of the guards rushed towards me, yelling as he went. There was no chance I was going to beat him in a heads-on attack, so I just ran. My speed far out-matched his own, giving me one advantage. Something told me to drop down on all fours. Animal instinct? Didn’t matter. I did as it told, and my speed increased even further still. I turned around and ran around behind the guard while he was swiping where I had just been. I jumped up on his back, my dagger up to his throat. He dropped his weapon and kneeled down on the ground. I jumped right off of his back and walked in front of him. I was breathing heavily, my chest pushing out and drawing in air. My feet were just barely starting to hurt. I could feel the absolute silence of the crowd, all staring at me. Then, they broke into cheering simultaneously.

   “The creature wins!” yelled Richard.

Wasn’t he on my side? He could at least use my name.

   Well, I had won my first fight. Was it going to get better? No. But had I left a better impression on the crowd? If it was worth anything, yes.

   “Perhaps I’ve been unfair. Not to this thing, no, but to the guards!”

   The crowd laughed again, mocking the guards. Maybe Richard was on my side.

   “If that’s so, let’s give them a one-person advantage!”

   No, he wasn’t on my side.

   The patrol from earlier stepped forward, both with long-reaching spears. They were none too pleased that a midget human-fox thing just defeated a well-trained guard.

   “BEGIN!”

   The guards went back-to-back, making sure I couldn’t get one alone. They stood there, waiting for me to make the first move. I knew minimal combat tactics, but I could tell that wouldn’t end well for me. So instead I stood back, doing what I always did when I was bored; flipped my dagger. The crowd laughed at the guards, making one of them red-faced, another yelling back at the crowd. They separated momentarily, and that was when I struck. I darted around their backs, just like the last, heading for the guard on the right of where I stood. I jumped up on his back, reached my arm around his neck and pointed the dagger straight in his eye. He picked me up right off of his shoulder with two hands, making me drop my weapon, but he had as well. He pulled me straight to his face, looking me in the eye. I did the only thing I could at that point; made a cheap shot. I spat in his face, making him drop me onto the ground. I picked up his weapon, an impairing weight to me, and threw it over to the crowd. They cheered, the only entertainment they had, apparently. I ran over to my dagger and moved back to my earlier position. Making it even better, the other guard hadn’t done anything while I decimated his buddy.

   “What were you doing?” yelled one of the guards while he wiped saliva out of his eyes.

   The other just shook his head, still red-faced.

   “Give me that!” yelled the guard, and took the other’s spear.

   He threw it over at me, angling it just right so that if I hadn’t dodged, I would’ve been stabbed in forehead.

   The crowd was still mocking the guards, some whistling, others making smart comments about their actions.

   “The guards forfeit! Our champion emerges from the fight victorious once more!” proclaimed Richard.

   The guard who had been spit on was outraged. He was yelling at the crowd and Richard, swearing that I, “a thing”, hadn’t beaten him. The other walked back into the armory, ashamed. The other followed after him.

   “Are the rest of the guards as frightened of him as these two?!” yelled Richard.

   None stepped forward.

   “Nobody wants to deny this creature his freedom?”

   The crowd was silent, but one person, male, moved away from the crowd, stepping towards me.

   “I will,” he said.

   He looked maybe five or six years older than what I once was. He carried the same weapons as I once had, a dagger and a bow. He was wearing leather and a modified guard’s helm. I could still see his face, and he looked plain bored.

   “And you are?” asked Richard.

   “Does it matter?” he asked him. “I’m in the mood for a good fight, and this thing”- DREZIN! -“seems like a good fight.”

   He drew out his bow and an arrow from his sling.

   “You going to yell ‘BEGIN’ or something?” he asked Richard. He reminded me a lot of my previous self.

   Richard sighed. “BEGIN!”

   I got down on all fours, narrowly dodging his arrow. He seemed shocked that he hadn’t killed me right away. I just kept running around him, making him angrier every time he missed his mark. I pulled out my dagger and ran around him, repeating the process for the third time. But before I could get my steel around his neck, he tracked me and got an arrow in the hand not carrying the dagger. Blood dropped on the stone, and I could smell it as I stopped where I was. He had another arrow drawn, and I procured the arrow in my paw. It stung, but Evine wasn’t lying; we were immortal. The skin was already healing around it while I dodged his arrows once again. I knew that he would track me again if I didn’t change up my patterns. I stood for a quick second and threw my dagger at him. I tripped over my tail yet again, altering my aim. I wasn’t surprised that stupid thing got in the way just when I didn’t want to. Blast it! Just missed! Now I had nothing to defend myself! But he just stood there, depleted of arrows. I looked down at my paw, wound non-existent.

   The man drew his dagger and ran over at me, but I fell down on all fours and began running again. I dashed over to my own weapon and picked it up, ready to counter him, but he had an arrow that hadn’t broken when he fired at me, ready to go in his bow. It flew through the air, about to pierce me between the eyes, but out of instinct I reached out, trying to stay alive.

I caught the weapon in the air.

   He relaxed and lowered his bow. I threw the arrow and dagger onto the ground and watched him, expecting some other plan. But he just walked away into the crowd, knowing that I wasn’t going to be beatable.

   It felt good making him sad, knowing someone was better than him. Evine probably felt the same way when he caught me in the dungeons. Of course, I had magic, but he had ranged weapons, at least putting me unconscious for a week if he caught me somewhere vital. The speed was the compensation for that stupid tail and those ears.

   The crowd slowly separated, some with whispers of discontent, others still cheering and laughing. Richard stepped over to me.

   “That was absolutely worth the time,” he said. “We just found one of our most valuable assets.”

   “I just got thrown into a home-made arena and told to survive against four people, one stupid, two morons and one sharpshooter who caught me, and you think I’m worth that time?!” I yelled at him.

   “You just showed the crowd that Brooke, Evine and you aren’t to be crossed! You think I threw you in there for fun?”

   Honestly, I had.

   “Also, you have shown the guard their new ally!” he yelled.

   ME? An ally of the guard?! No. That wasn’t going to happen. Evine has dragged me out of bad situations enough times; he doesn’t need to do it again.

   “Th-that’s nice, but I don’t think it’s a good idea,” I tried to convince him.

   Richard handed me a letter with the guards seal on it. I had seen this before when Cyrus was approved for the guard. Of course, I wasn’t looking forward to this like he had.

   I tore it open with my claws and looked at the parchment inside:


DEAR SIR:
You have been approved for the Lyniel Hold guard.
Your official commanding officer is: Orinoco Credd
You are to speak with: Richard Alay regarding your accommodations.
Fight the good fight!

Richard Alay


   Orinoco Credd?! It was bad enough that Richard pushed me into the guard, but it was worse when he put me into Orinoco’s squad!

   “Look, I know it’s strange to you, being in the guard and all while you’re like this, but-“

   “No, that’s not it,” I interrupted Richard, “even though this is strange. It’s just that this officer and I go back.”

   Way back. When I was ten or so, I was stealing from vendors when I had nothing better to do. No, my family (or lack thereof) didn’t need any food; Evine fed me before he brought me into bounty hunting. I just stole for sport. But when I was stealing from a stall rather close to the guard’s armory, Orinoco caught me, him being the youngest guard, and put me in the dungeons for the first time. Then, for my second time in the dungeons, he was the guard on day patrol.

   “I thought that man looked familiar,” Richard said.

   “THAT was Orinoco?!”

   “The only good archer in the guard, so you shouldn’t have a problem in combat.”

   Wow. I defeated four well-trained guards with cleverness and thievery. Richard was very accurate with his previous statement.

   “Follow me,” Richard said, maneuvering through the few bits of the crowd left.

   I made sure to grab my dagger before we left. “You’re showing me to my accommodations, then?” I asked him.

   “Yes. You’ll be staying with Evine and Brooke up in the Arcanist’s Library.”

-----

   “Do you know where Drezin is right now, Evine?” Brooke asked of me.

   She had interrupted my casting, but it didn’t matter; my magic was enhanced doubly so when I became like this.

   I stood and answered her, “Richard said he was going to test his combat skills at the armory.”

Nothing was simple with Drezin. “What happened?”

   “Leena said she just saw him in a pit-fight! She came running back to tell me when she saw him get wounded by an arrow!” Brooke yelled.

   “Shouldn’t be too bad,” I told her. “Drezin doesn’t like stopping for anything. Add that on to the fact that we’re immortal, and you have a deadly match-up.”

   Brooke became more impatient and shook her head. “I’m sorry, I just get worried over the tiniest little thing, and I can’t handle any little bit of pressure, and now I’m like this, too, and here we are, just the three of us, and-“

   I put my hand on her shoulder. “Calm down, okay? I know Drezin. He’s like a son.”

   She took a few deep breaths. “Alright. I’ll guess we’ll see how he’s doing when he arrives here.”

   Now it was my turn to be worried.

   “Drezin’s coming over here?” I asked.

   “Yes, that’s what Richard said,” Brooke replied. “Why?”

   “It’s just that…”

   “What?”

   I gave a long sigh. “I guess I should explain to you how Drezin, a fourteen-year-old thief, and me, a thirty-year-old mage, wound up together.” I motioned for her to take a seat. She sat, and I did the same.

   “You know how I said that Drezin was like a son to me?” I asked.

   She nodded.

   “I was moving through Lyniel one day, trying to reach the Arcanist’s Library to study. The crowds were very thick, perfect for pick-pocket-ers. I happened to ignore that, and once I had reached the thickest part of the crowd, a small hand came by my side and took this book.” I lifted up my spell-book to show her. “I could barely see a small child wearing rags running through the people quickly, the book in his hand, so I chased after him. Once we both left the crowds and entered an alley, I managed to get a hold of his hand and picked him up in the air.”

-----

   “And you are?” I asked the small child.

   He didn’t answer. He kept struggling to get free.

   “Well?”

   He still didn’t answer.

   I casted a spell to shock him, a small spark. I let go of him, and he fell to the ground and whimpered a bit.

   “H-how’d you do that?” he asked.

   “Answer my question, and I’ll answer yours,” I negotiated.

   He sat there and thought over the deal, staring down at the ground. Then he looked up.

   “Drezin,” he said.

   “And why are you stealing on the streets?” I probed on.

   “Where’s my answer?”

Smart kid.

   I sighed. “Magic,” I responded. “Now why are you stealing here on the streets?”

   “If you want more answers, I want to learn how to do that, and more.”

   I gave another long, dissatisfied sigh. “It takes time to learn magic, Drezin. You can’t just think it to happen and it does.”

   He stood up. “I have time.”

   “I’ll teach you later,” I told him, “if you can give me answers now.”

   Drezin flipped through the spell book. “What are those?” he asked.

   “Spells.”

   “The things with black?” He was pointing at the letters, piece by piece.

   “Those are letters. You don’t know how to read?”

   “You can teach me though, right?”

   Maybe this kid wasn’t as smart as I thought he was. A mage doesn’t have time for a family; every mage that ever was and is knows that! Yet he stood there, flipping through the pages, looking at the words and parchment, thinking of nothing else. Did he even have any family? He closed the book and handed it over to me.

   “Here,” Drezin said.

   I took it from his hand and put it back onto my side. I started to turn around and leave, but he tugged on my robe.

   “What?” I asked angrily.

   “You said you’d teach me.” For a child thief, he believed anything he was told.

   “Yes, I said that.”

   He looked expectantly at me. Was this how a parent felt when they first saw their child? Couldn’t be. I wasn’t going to have a family, and certainly not a makeshift one.

   I sighed yet again, and lifted him up onto my shoulders. He was surprisingly light, but if he was stealing on the streets, he probably wouldn’t have eaten much. We departed from the alley and walked through the crowd. I still headed toward my destination, the Library, and Drezin looked around at the city.

   “Where is your family?” I asked him.

   “’Family’?” he questioned.

   “Do you have a father or a mother? Or a sister or a brother?”

   “I don’t know what you mean,” he said.

   I knew very well by now that I was helping a street urchin.

   “Don’t you live with anybody?”

   “I did,” Drezin said.

   “Where are they?” I asked.

   “People said the bug got ‘em.”

   That flu outbreak was terrible. The fact that many people didn’t trust mages only led them towards a swifter death.

   “Did those people help you?”

   “No.”

   “Do you steal food from people to stay alive?”

   “Yeah.” He looked down at me in the eyes. “People don’t like it. Is it bad?”

   Naïve child. But I couldn’t do anything to help him besides tell him what not to do. I nodded.

   “I’m sorry. But nobody feeds me.” We walked on in silence through the crowds for a few more
seconds. Drezin interrupted, “My turn. What’s your name?”

   “Evine,” I told him.

   “Where are you going?”

   “The Arcanist’s Library.”

   “Ar-can-eest? What’s that?”

   “It’s where people like me go to learn more spells, like the one I shocked you with.”

   He looked down at me again and smiled. “Can you teach me there?”

   “Maybe another time.” He did seem pretty pitiful. “Do you need somewhere to stay tonight?”

   “I go sit down back in that alley when the sun goes over the castle. It gets cold all the time. Is it warmer where you sleep?”

   I nodded.

   “I’ll stay with you, then.”

-----

   “So that’s how you met. But why did you become bounty hunters?” asked Brooke.

   “You need gold to survive, don’t you? Drezin fights well, and I’m a mage, so we have an uncanny knack for killing. We had a third mercenary friend, but he perished at the hands of whoever did this to us.” I pointed at myself and her.

   “Why are you scared of seeing Drezin here?”

   “Drezin has been waiting for the last ten years to learn magic from me!” I got up and started pacing around the room. “What if he or I can’t learn it or pass it on? Or what if he understands it more than anyone before, and kills himself with it to end this change? I just don’t know how this will work in the long run…”

   “He might not even remember. Don’t put so much pressure on yourself.”

   Brooke stood up and walked over to me, putting her hand on my shoulder.

   “You know him better than me. You’ll know what to do.”

   There was a moment of silence.

   “You’re right,” I told her. “I’ll teach him the best I can.”

   Footsteps flooded the room where the two of us were discussing the future. One person, something making a slight *tick* noise as they walked on the wood floor.

   It was Drezin. He waved at Brooke and me, carrying a dagger in one hand and a letter in the other.  He saw Brooke’s hand on my shoulder, but he just leaned against a book-shelf, uncaring.

   “Hello,” Brooke said, taking her hand off and sitting down. He waved again.

   “Drezin,” I said, nodding. He moved over to a table and placed his dagger there. He forced the letter in my hands, encouraging me to read.

   Approved for the guard? Drezin?

   “Surprised?” he asked, disappointed. “So am I.”

   “How did you get into the guard?”

   “Richard put me in a pit-fight, said I did well, and handed me this letter. No explanation whatsoever. You saw the officer name, too?”

   “Yes! But what do you plan on doing now?” I yelled.

   “Ignoring any guard meetings or anything like that, for one,” he said. “I was hoping you could tell me, since you guys have been here for a while.”

   Drezin had a point. We were things nobody wanted to have anything to do with, living forever with this curse.

   “I could try some spells on you to see if we could break this spell,” I told him.

   “I thought you said we were stuck like this,” Brooke chimed in.

   “Never hurts to try. I’ve been waiting to try some spells for myself, anyway,” Drezin replied.

   He sat down at my feet and curled his tail into his lap. He threw his dark cloak and letter onto the table and sat there expectantly.

   “Well?” he asked.

   I sighed and began writing a rune with a stick of chalk on the floor between all three of us. I began casting a spell that could work; a shape shifting spell to counteract the previous one. Drezin took his tail and started jabbing it with his claws. Brooke sat there, observing Drezin and myself. Words flew through my lips, not mattering what came out as long as it helped the spell. I could feel the magic coursing through the rune, but nothing was changing. I tried urging the magic onward, to do something.

   But nothing happened.

   I stopped casting and took in a deep breath.

   “Evine?” Brooke asked.

   I shook my head. “It’s fine,” I told her.

   “Nothing,” Drezin said. He was still stabbing his tail.

   “I’ll try something else,” I told them.

   I wiped away the previous chalk and drew two new runes, interloping. I could try the melding spell Eleanor had used in reverse to separate the animal and human, even though I knew it wouldn’t work. I recalled the words Eleanor had used and threw them out backwards. Drezin seemed intent on something in the room, but I couldn’t follow his eyes to see what it was. Brooke looked through the approval letter and I tried to focus on the aura of the runes. I tried to pull them apart from eachother, getting them separated. I thought I had made progress, but it was finished before any could be made.

   I fell on my knees, exhausted, crushing my tail. I couldn’t think; I just fell, letting my body stay still.

   “Evine!” Brooke yelled as she ran over to me.

   “It’s… fine…” I tried to comfort her. Even Drezin walked over and inspected me.

   “No, it’s not!” she yelled.

   “Relax, Brooke, he’s been through worse,” Drezin laughed. “Me, for example.”

   She slapped him on the muzzle and looked down in my eyes.

   “What was that for?!” Drezin screeched. His voice was ridiculously high as he covered his face.

   “Are you okay?” Brooke asked worriedly.

   “I’m really fine,” I told her.

   She took my hands and pulled me up to my feet. She walked me over to her chair and sat me down in it.

   “Brooke, it’s not that bad,” I reassured her.

   Drezin was stamping out the runes while Brooke brought over my spell-book.

   “Do you have any healing spells or anything like that?” she asked.

   “I’m just a little exhausted; I’m not going to die without help.”

   Brooke hovered over me, asking if I needed anything, while Drezin stood watching us.

   “Can I just talk to Drezin alone?” I asked her.

   She stared at me, mouth gaping. She glanced over at Drezin and back to me. Then she nodded, and left the room.

   Drezin interrupted the brief silence with a huge laugh.

   “You should have seen your face! Face, muzzle, whatever!”

   “That’s not the point!” I told him. Brooke was embarrassing me more than a bit. “Did you feel any different at all during either of the spells?”

   He calmed down until his laugh was a small chuckle. “Not a bit,” he said between laughs.

I sighed and looked through the book, seeing if there was anything else I could try. Drezin picked up his cloak and his dagger and began to leave.

“Wait!” I called out. He stopped and turned around.

“I thought you’d want Brooke back in here by now,” Drezin mocked.

“Truth be told, I’m worried about that, but that’s still not the point. Are you going to go see Orinoco later?” I asked. Drezin nodded. “Make sure you ask Richard while you’re out there to assemble that team of mages.”

“Why? Do you already want to take down Eleanor?”

“Eleanor wouldn’t be staying in the same cave if she allowed you and I live. But she might have left those spells behind, and maybe we could find one to remove the foxes.”

Drezin swirled his cloak around his body and nodded. He walked out slowly and carefully, probably trying to avoid tripping on his tail like he had been before. After he had disappeared from sight, Brooke rushed right back into the room, her ears and tail down.

“I’m sorry!” she said, on the verge of crying.

Can we cry?

“Calm down,” I told her. “It’s not your fault. Like you said, we are the only were-foxes alive. I can understand why you were worried.”

“I need to find somewhere else to be. I can’t keep bothering you!” she said. “I’ll… I’ll go help Leena with something, anything. I’ll just find something else to do than bother you!”

“Brooke,” I told her, “don’t worry so much. I promise you, Drezin and I are fine. Just find some way to feel normal like this.” I picked up my spell book and skimmed through a few of the shape shifting spells to try and find whatever Eleanor might have used. “Even if it means bothering me. I don’t mind.”

She seemed to calm down. “Thank you,” she sniffled. “I’ll just find something to do.”

-----

“Get that thing away from me.”

I started swiping at the gray-white cat with my dagger, but the thing continued to stare at my swishing tail.

I was ready to stab it if it pounced.

“He’s not a thing. He’s an Albino Plains Lion, and he is going to do what he wants with you. I’m your captain now. He is my pet, and you are my lackey. If he wants to eat some fox stew, I don’t have to spend gold for food or waste time hunting.”

“Well, Captain Sharpshooter, I don’t think dogs like cats. And I’m a canine-human. Just get it away before I ‘accidentally’ stab it.”

He jumped up out of the seat and had an arrow pointing at my throat.

“Touch it, and I kill you.”

Oh, what friends we were.

“Fang, back off.”

Immediately the cat dropped its attention from my tail and walked into a corner of the room. Orinoco traced the arrow along my gullet before taking it back and sitting back down, reading over some more papers.

“You and your mage friend look so stupid,” he said. “I was ready to laugh every moment you tripped on your tail when you walked around the hold.”

“It’s not so easy. I’d like to see you try.”

   I would like to see him try being like this.

   Heh heh.

   “Yes, well, as the case so holds, you and the other two are the only ones like this. So, as far as I’m concerned, I don’t need to try.”

   Oh, as soon as we’re finished chatting, I’m cashing in a favor. And you will need to try.

   “My name is Drezin! And the others are named Evine and Brooke!” I yelled at him.

   “I’m aware of that. But why should I have to address a dog by name? Who’s the one that threw you into the dungeon once? And the one that watched you sit and do nothing until that other rag-tag mage dragged you out?”

   That was enough. Insulting me, I was used to. But insulting Evine? Sure, I was the thief kid who everybody either kicked in the gut when he was down or felt sorry for but never did anything. And when Evine helped me out, I wasn’t going to let anyone insult him because he took care of me. I wasn’t going to let anyone think badly of the one person who looked out for me.

   By some miracle, I was able to keep my temper and not gut his cat.

   I was looking forward to the next time I saw Orinoco, for once.

-----

   “Evine.”

   The voice broke up my casting, but when I realized the source, it wasn’t too terribly annoying. It was only Drezin.

   I opened my eyes and scanned him over. Still hadn’t killed anybody. Good.

   “Drezin. Did you talk to Orinoco concerning an escort to the cave?”

   “Not Orinoco,” he said. “He isn’t going to cooperate with me. I talked with Richard. He said whenever we’re ready, he’ll send some guards. He also said Orinoco is included.” He frowned.

   “Drop your differences. We’ll need friends if we want to live like this,” I told him.

   “That’s why I’m here. Orinoco has a special ‘bond’ with his cat. I say we could make that bond stronger, and…”

   “No, Drezin! It’s bad enough that we have three of us!”

   “And have him experience what it’s like to be his cat for a short time. We don’t need another one of us, just a shape shifting spell, a temporary one.”

   Maybe it could work. Maybe.

   “You said you’d teach me magic one day, anyway. Revenge is so much sweeter when you get it yourself.”

   “I… I suppose it won’t be too… bad of a lesson for magic…”

   I could tell he was determined.

   Something was wrong. He’s never been so determined. Besides…

   “Drezin, I’m not your family. We both know that. I’m used to being insulted, as well. You don’t need to look out for me. I can take care of myself.”

   “That’s not the point! I’ve been waiting to learn magic for a while, anyway. Just… please, Evine. I know how it looks. Please…”

   I sighed. “Alright.”

-----

   I turned the brass knob and pushed the door open into Orinoco’s office. He didn’t deserve one, but he had it, anyway.

   I checked the room for any signs of the archer. All I could see was his wooden desk and his mangy cat. No other signs of anyone else in the room.

   Slowly and being sure I didn’t make any noise on the floor or trip over my tail, I walked over to his cat and prodded it with a claw from my foot. It opened an eye and looked me over.

   Had the magic worked? I didn’t have a clue. Only one way to see.

   “Orinoco?” I asked quietly.

   Surely enough, it answered. “What?” it said dreamily. It yawned. “What… Drezin? Where…”
   Ah, perfect. He gets to be the one mocked, and I get to hear him suffer.

   “Hello, Orinoco.” I held back a laugh while I spoke. “Wake up, would you?”

   The cat seemed shocked as it opened another eye and looked around. Seeing somebody I despised go through a change was so much better than seeing myself. It slowly stood on all fours, stretched, and yawned.

   “Wait. You’re… bigger than me… and so is the room…” He looked down at the ground where his paws were pushing him off the ground. “I’m… F-f-fang?!”

   I couldn’t hold back the laugh. It broke out and I had to rely on the wall for support while I watched him study his new feline body.

   “You bastard!” it yelled. “You and your mage friend are going to… When I get back, that is!”

   I slid down the side of the wall, holding my chest and cloak while I laughed, watching him stumble across the floor on all fours. He hissed once, but before it could even become a warning, he was falling down on his head again.

   “This… this was worth the pit-fight and then some!” I yelled. Apparently our voices weren’t too loud. No other guards came in to check on the weird screaming and laughing.

   “Change me back! Now! I want to be human again!” he said.

   “Now you know how we feel.”

   “What?!” he squeaked. “You… you can change me back, right?!”

   I quit laughing so I could deal with his uneasiness. “I can’t, but it’ll wear off by tomorrow.”

   “Tomorrow?! No, no, I want back now!”

   “Can’t. Simple as that. All I did was do what Evine told me.”

   He slowly gathered himself and managed to stand on all fours without falling. “This is terrible! How am I supposed to do anything? All I can do is talk and fall over!”

   “Get over yourself. I’ve been like this for the past few days and will be forever. You’re only going to be like this for a day.” I pushed myself off the floor and watched while he looked worried at me. I flipped my dagger while I waited for an idea for anything to discuss with a talking cat.

   “W-where’s the real Fang?” he asked quietly.

   “You are Fang. You’re also Orinoco. All the magic did was combine you, and you show as Fang.”

   “Why’d you do this?”

   “You were being overall an annoying person. So now, you aren’t a person. That’s all.”

   “I’m sorry…” he muttered.

   “Yeah, well, being sorry isn’t going to fix it. Deal with it for a day, and maybe I won’t do it again.”
   He changed his stance until he was sitting like Fang had the other day after he forgot about my tail. He licked one of his paws, and looked back at the tail sweeping across the wood.

   “Why so long? You don’t like being an animal.”

   “You made fun of us. Now, I get to make fun of you.”

   “What am I supposed to do?”

   “I don’t know. You took care of that lion before. You know better than me.”

   “ What, am I going to tell you to do something and you’ll do it for me?”

   I gave a sarcastic laugh. “Hah-hah. No. In fact, I think I’ll just be going now…”




There. That's the writing. There are no words I can use to describe it. Hope you enjoyed!  |:P



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Reply #2 on: September 13, 2010, 11:09:35 AM
If you allow me to repeat what I said before... it doesn't seem to be too much of a ripoff, really. So even if it is (and I still believe you're just too hard on yourself about your work, like so many Creative Folks around here are), you're hiding it quite well. {:P

I don't have much to complain about - the earliest parts might use some rearranging of the sentences, maybe... some lines there are just slightly awkwardly written. Or maybe it was just the effect of reading it in the dark at 2am...
And well, the retrospection scene where Drezin and Evine first met, is slightly naive. As in, the mage doesn't seem too friendly in general, so just why was he so kind to the young thief? I don't know thing about writing, honestly, but maybe if you'd make Evine explain just why he decided to take him... but maybe I'm just missing something.
What else? Well, two minor nit-picks are the few places you're useing the word "anthro" - it just doesn't seem to be something that you'd use to descripbe the form in a medieval world... the places you use "werefox", or "human fox" sound more fitting - and your focus on the tailtips... that is, you point out they're white like it'd be so special, while they're "the usual" thing for reds, and well, wrong for the gray {;). Of course, if it's gonna be a plot point later, sorry for the accusation. {:)

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Reply #3 on: September 14, 2010, 10:28:20 PM
The 1st person perspective threw me for a loop when characters started getting switched around; I had to back track and read over several times at the start of your second post before I realized who was the perspective character was.  Perhaps if you want to keep the 1st person you could go the Animorphs route and announce in bold letters who the perspective is above each "chapter." (.... belatedly realizes that Animorphs was way before your time, but that method should be relatively straightforward)

Also, I didn't quite get why Drezin, at 14, is viewed as good enough by Richard to stand against all those guards in the pit.  What reason did Richard have to suspect that Drezin could take them all on and that he'd make a good addition to the guards?  Were their altercations from before the Elanor incident particularly notable in this respect?

So then... is this the whole story or is there more?  Because you are way better at writing at 13 than I was and you should really keep working to make yourself even better.

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Reply #4 on: September 14, 2010, 10:41:17 PM
Well, thanks for reading my story, whoever has! I didn't expect anyone to read it, quite frankly |:P

As for the perspective changes, yeah, I've been told many times now that they weren't so great, so I'll have to work on that. And I've never even touched an Animorphs book. EVER. Saw one when I was 8, I think, but never even bothered to look at it! |:P

For the plot questions and such, yeah, I didn't really plan on any reason for Evine taking Drezin along, just... being an overall clingy child, and apparently Evine was feeling like he was supposed to be a father or something. I dunno >.> Also, yes, the fur patterns weren't researched by the 12 year old version of me! <.<

And I guess the only excuse I could use for Drezin being viewed as capable of holding his own against the guards is a high respect/fear of magic in this story universe... thing. I needed to have a fight scene so I could introduce my friend's character, the one Orinoco >.>


Anyway, again, I have to thank ya for reading! This is all I had for the story, and yeah, abrupt ending and all that >.> I... may or may not work on this again... Will see |;)