Pokemon Star Rangers: Falling behind in the storm

[William Swiftfoot]

Hey all,

Pokemon Star Rangers is a RPG Im in on a world with Anthro Pokemon, and a space camp for younger kids. As part of the RPG, people setup stories and such. At the current moment, the camp went on a field trip back on the planet near mount moon when a storm rolled in. One of the other players asked to do an RPG with me having to do with trying to find shelter in the storm, and this is the result.

http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3165210/

[Jonas]

I think that image is flagged as "mature"

[Virmir]

Hmmm, yep.  Getting a mature flag on that one.

[William Swiftfoot]

Linked fixed after an ok.

[Virmir]

Interesting little scene, but I had a bit of trouble following what was going on. Probably because I'm not familiar with the setting.  I'm assuming they're both Pokemon?  There was a mention that Alexis had a leaf-arm at the end, which was the only hint I picked up.

A couple minor typos such as missing capitalization and punctuation along the way.  Also, make sure to keep only one speaker per paragraph. Not bad, though!  I might be interested in reading a full story about Pokemon.  I've never read one before.

[William Swiftfoot]

Yea, Pokemon Star Rangers is an Story/Picture/RPG group based around anthromorphic pokemon characters. The main story is based around a camp based on a space camp set in a orbiting space station above the planet, but the first couple events were a field trip around mount moon.