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Xandriel

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on: July 31, 2014, 09:57:25 PM
hi white here with another story.
angry about being copied white runs after the doppleganger.
white catches up the with the copy cat of a monster.
white fights the doppleganger but at the cost of his left eye he beats it.
now blind sided white gets a call from base about reports of odd occurrences in a local town.
ok i'll be on my way says white.
as he heads to his motor bike white is stopped by a random guy that gives him an eyepatch, thanks says white.
as white gets on the bike he puts on the eyepatch then drives away.
when he reaches the given address white gets the sudden feeling that he's being watched.
white enters the building and investigates after a while he hears a scream.
startled he runs towards the source soon white runs into a lab door white can hear crying so he tries to pry the door open.
blast it's jammed says white unable to get the door open he punches a wall then starts looking for another way to get in.
as he turns away the door opens and a monster that white had never seen before comes out.
noticing that the crying had stopped turns toward the door and is emediatly attacked by the monster.
now injured to a greater extent, not good says white drawing his weapon.
after a while white eventually  kills the monster.
afterwards white checks the lab and see's a man lying next to a wall he checks the man's pulse, blast dead says white.
getting up white notices a portal, must be how the monster got here says white finds the portals panel and closes the portal.
white leaves the building and heads back to base.



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Reply #1 on: August 08, 2014, 10:50:38 PM
White! Come one, man, you can manage some paragraphs here!

What you have right here is a story outline. What you need to do next is flesh out all the sentences into paragraphs with description and punctuation. You can do better than this!

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Reply #2 on: August 12, 2014, 06:32:39 PM
thanks for the lecture virmir  :p