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Author Topic: Risu's Story-Attempt Ideadumps  (Read 427 times)
« on: March 29, 2012, 06:42:49 AM »

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EDiT:- Updated with some slight revisions. Went back and condensed the chapter summaries whose full versions woulda been too short.


Quote from: Risu's brain
Ch.1 - A Traitor Appears. (AKA "Arms Race, pt.1")

Mekuta, Parrow's childhood rival, comes to Orion City to exact revenge against him. He accuses Parrow of seriously hurting his younger sister, Ayeme. As a result, Ayeme had to undergo several expensive and unsuccessful surgical operations, which eventually led to her death.

Parrow nonetheless denies ever committing any such crimes. Outraged, Mekuta proceeds to kidnap and detain him until he admits these allegations to be true. But if he fails to confess after a certain number of chances....

Meanwhile, Rupert - who until now had not been very close with Parrow - decides to rescue his roommate. First however, he needs to gather enough counter-evidence to prove Parrow's innocence. But he's on a significant time limit. Luckily, his hasty research yeilds some fruit.

Rupert suspects that the deed was done by a notorious shapeshifter, known simply as "_____". He thinks this becos' a simular incident occurred back when he was in middle school. Once he has the evidence printed out, he tracks the signal broadcasted from Parrow's Wristpad. But he is stunned to find out that Jasper, Rupert's girlfriend, is working with Mekuta!

Parrow still does not budge. Despite the incredible pain, he stays with his position. Disappointed, Mekuta starts up the torture device designed to inject liquid-hot metal into one's bone tissue. He chose this method in order to "immortalise their hatred" from one another. Then he shows off his arm branded with the emblem of Lazarus City.

(Orion City used to boycott Lazarus City for inventing propetual energy before they did. But the demand for electric power in Orion City continued to increase, as more and more refugees from Earth kept arriving in droves onto Escape. As a result, Orion City nearly went bust, while Lazarus City prospered. Eventually, Orion City reluctantly agreed to spend its last reserves of money to build a EM power plant. The infrastructural delapidation and extremely poor quality of living caused by this feud is still blatantly evident all thruout the lowest tiers of Orion City, now known as the Scum Dwellings.)

Rupert attempts to call Jasper using the Wristpad integrated into his biomechanical left arm. Much to his relief, she picks up. He then goes on to explain his findings, and forwards her a copy of the evidence, urging her to inform Mekuta right away. As she does so, she can hear dreadful screams of agony coming from the basement....
« Last Edit: April 14, 2012, 01:05:21 PM by Risu » Logged

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« Reply #1 on: April 05, 2012, 11:19:12 PM »

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Sounds exciting! Look forward to reading this. Happy Gray Fox It's interesting to see this story evolve over time.
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« Reply #2 on: April 15, 2012, 05:19:12 PM »

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I'm gonna start anew thread for this. Apparently I was told I posted it wrong. I shoulda revealed it little by little at a time, 'stead of cramming it all into the first post.

But don't worry tho', the idea still hasn't been scrapped, yet if ever.
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